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| "Chipotle" (via Forbes). |
In the article, "Chipotle is Sued for Non-GMO Advertising," the author takes a crack at forcing a one-sided view on the reader, while also accusing them of fearing genetically modified organisms. This is just one example of how people in the field of nutrition tend to write opinionated articles, without addressing the opposing argument.
Of my two statements, the first is very broad, and the second actually talks about the article in my project. I definitely like the second more, but it is hard not to make broad and generalized statements.
I read Lia's blog and Hunter's blog. Lia's thesis statements were more specific, and Hunter's were more similar to mine. I think that it is tough to craft a thesis statement for this project because you have to address the text you will be talking about, and also the question of rhetorical style/strategies.
WOW!! I noticed the same trend too in nutritional sources/arguments. I love how you said it concisely. I don't think I did it as concise as you. I agree with you that the second thesis is better because it is more specific. I thought the first one was good, but it was way too general. I think your second thesis was basically a development of the first. You address the audience that the author of the article targets and you address the audience that you're speaking to. Very well-done.
ReplyDeleteI would say your second thesis was better because it is equally concise as the first thesis, but covers more. Try to address which rhetorical strategies or techniques the author is using in the article and the effect that it has on the audience.
ReplyDeleteI agree with what you said about which thesis you liked better. I think that both provide the reader with enough information to read your essay, but I think the second thesis allows the reader to know what they are going to read and what to expect in your essay. I also had a broader thesis and a more specific one.
ReplyDeleteI really like how you state right away that the article is one-sided, because I think that's an important thing to know and effects the rhetorical strategies used. The first sentence does a good job of stating the purpose of the article, too. The only thing is that I found this part "accusing them of fearing genetically modified organisms" a little confusing, because I didn't know at first who the "them" was you were referring to. Does the author accuse the audience directly? If so, that's really interesting. I also liked how at the end you tied your thesis to our assignment specifically. Nice work!
ReplyDeleteI feel like in this case, a more focused thesis statement would help, as your article is pretty narrow. However, that's not a bad thing, as you can definitely get a great rhetorical analysis out of a specific subject. Overall, I believe your second thesis statement is superior, as I can clearly see the author's beliefs and your beliefs as well. Well done!
ReplyDeleteGood job. I think that you did a great job of explaining the purpose of the article, but you could include more of the rhetorical strategies that the author used to accomplish that purpose. I definitely like your 2nd one better because you identify the specific article that you're talking about.
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